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Road Trip From Above-
I thought this story was very good. The story was very fluent and was easy to read because of its interesting thoughts and ideas. I really liked the end of the story and it wrapped it up in a good way. I really think that your descriptions on places and people were above average and kept the story alive and cooking. Well done I think maybe there could have been a little more conflict to lead to the climax but it was definitely good enough. I think maybe try a new beginning maybe a little paragraph describing the setting so the reader can feel like they are actually in the story. Good story
I thought this story was very good. The story was very fluent and was easy to read because of its interesting thoughts and ideas. I really liked the end of the story and it wrapped it up in a good way. I really think that your descriptions on places and people were above average and kept the story alive and cooking. Well done I think maybe there could have been a little more conflict to lead to the climax but it was definitely good enough. I think maybe try a new beginning maybe a little paragraph describing the setting so the reader can feel like they are actually in the story. Good story
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